應(yīng)試必備： 英語四級(jí)級(jí)作文點(diǎn)睛
改詞擴(kuò)句
不改變?cè)涞囊馑迹瑑H通過詞匯、語法手段使句子看起來更高級(jí)、地道。下面請(qǐng)看例子：
例1
Others think that the utilization of waste products will be eliminated sooner or later with the emergence of hi-te . However, I did not consider that factor carefully. Because I hold the view that waste materials can be made good use of to help reduce the living cost.
原句：I did not consider that factor carefully.
改句：I fail to take that factor into careful consideration.
【解析】
在這個(gè)簡單句中，主要做了兩個(gè)改變，一是把did not改成fail to, 同樣的意思，可是詞匯應(yīng)用的靈活度卻大大提高。
二是把considercarefully改成了take sth into careful consideration，在考場作文中，詞組的運(yùn)用是個(gè)亮點(diǎn)，而且英語中靜態(tài)居多(名詞用的多)，漢語中動(dòng)態(tài)居多(動(dòng)詞用的多)，在此把動(dòng)詞consider變成名詞consideration，頓時(shí)使英文更加地道。
例2
原句：
You are enthusiastic and enterprising. And you are one of the most talented and diligent in our department. You have already won 2 awards for good academic results.
改句：
You, enthusiastic and enterprising,are one of the most talented and diligent in our department,already winning 2 awards for outstanding academic results.
【解析】
我們可以看到例句中有3個(gè)簡單句，咋看上去給人一種啰嗦、累贅的感覺。但細(xì)看之下，不難發(fā)現(xiàn)3個(gè)句子的主語全部是you，因此我們就該聯(lián)想到同位語、插入語的應(yīng)用。從改句中，我們可以發(fā)現(xiàn)謂語從原來的3個(gè)變成了1個(gè)，頓時(shí)使句子顯得高級(jí)，精簡很多。其次，還有一個(gè)改動(dòng)之處為good，這個(gè)詞是常用詞，口語中用的更頻繁些，我們可以想一些同義詞例如excellent，outstanding等等。
例3
原句：
In order to live a good life, it is becoming more and more important for people to learn knowledge well. Because in this modern world, knowledge is everything.
改句：
In order to live a happy life, it is becoming increasingly important for people to acquire knowledge well, for the reason that knowledge is everything in this modern world.
【解析】
首先我們看到原句中出現(xiàn)了more and more，在四六級(jí)作文中，它可算是常客，對(duì)閱卷老師而言，不具任何吸引力，而且有落入俗套的危險(xiǎn)哦，所以在我們把它用一個(gè)簡單的副詞來替代，副詞修飾形容詞，相信會(huì)令人感覺眼前一亮。
其次，我們還要注意一個(gè)搭配問題，原句中的learn knowledge是明顯的中式英語，很多同學(xué)會(huì)誤用，正確的搭配應(yīng)該是acquire knowledge。
最后，我們有余力可以把句子通過從句進(jìn)行相連，使句子看起來更有結(jié)構(gòu)感。
改詞擴(kuò)句
不改變?cè)涞囊馑迹瑑H通過詞匯、語法手段使句子看起來更高級(jí)、地道。下面請(qǐng)看例子：
例1
Others think that the utilization of waste products will be eliminated sooner or later with the emergence of hi-te . However, I did not consider that factor carefully. Because I hold the view that waste materials can be made good use of to help reduce the living cost.
原句：I did not consider that factor carefully.
改句：I fail to take that factor into careful consideration.
【解析】
在這個(gè)簡單句中，主要做了兩個(gè)改變，一是把did not改成fail to, 同樣的意思，可是詞匯應(yīng)用的靈活度卻大大提高。
二是把considercarefully改成了take sth into careful consideration，在考場作文中，詞組的運(yùn)用是個(gè)亮點(diǎn)，而且英語中靜態(tài)居多(名詞用的多)，漢語中動(dòng)態(tài)居多(動(dòng)詞用的多)，在此把動(dòng)詞consider變成名詞consideration，頓時(shí)使英文更加地道。
例2
原句：
You are enthusiastic and enterprising. And you are one of the most talented and diligent in our department. You have already won 2 awards for good academic results.
改句：
You, enthusiastic and enterprising,are one of the most talented and diligent in our department,already winning 2 awards for outstanding academic results.
【解析】
我們可以看到例句中有3個(gè)簡單句，咋看上去給人一種啰嗦、累贅的感覺。但細(xì)看之下，不難發(fā)現(xiàn)3個(gè)句子的主語全部是you，因此我們就該聯(lián)想到同位語、插入語的應(yīng)用。從改句中，我們可以發(fā)現(xiàn)謂語從原來的3個(gè)變成了1個(gè)，頓時(shí)使句子顯得高級(jí)，精簡很多。其次，還有一個(gè)改動(dòng)之處為good，這個(gè)詞是常用詞，口語中用的更頻繁些，我們可以想一些同義詞例如excellent，outstanding等等。
例3
原句：
In order to live a good life, it is becoming more and more important for people to learn knowledge well. Because in this modern world, knowledge is everything.
改句：
In order to live a happy life, it is becoming increasingly important for people to acquire knowledge well, for the reason that knowledge is everything in this modern world.
【解析】
首先我們看到原句中出現(xiàn)了more and more，在四六級(jí)作文中，它可算是常客，對(duì)閱卷老師而言，不具任何吸引力，而且有落入俗套的危險(xiǎn)哦，所以在我們把它用一個(gè)簡單的副詞來替代，副詞修飾形容詞，相信會(huì)令人感覺眼前一亮。
其次，我們還要注意一個(gè)搭配問題，原句中的learn knowledge是明顯的中式英語，很多同學(xué)會(huì)誤用，正確的搭配應(yīng)該是acquire knowledge。
最后，我們有余力可以把句子通過從句進(jìn)行相連，使句子看起來更有結(jié)構(gòu)感。
