2024屆高考英語二輪復習書面表達專項練習18 未來與理想話題指導

　　2024屆高考英語二輪復習書面表達復習專題18 未來與理想話題指導

　　實例指導1—未來資訊報道

　　【寫作任務】

　　假設現在是2024年，你是China Daily的一名記者，請你根據下面的采訪記錄寫—篇資訊報道。

　　注意：要求詞數：120-150。報道的格式已經給出，不計入總詞數。

　　Xichang，Sichuan，Sep．25(Xinhua)－___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

　　【寫作指導】

　　1．了解資訊報道的篇章結構，確定本文的結構和寫作內容。

　　資訊報道類寫作的篇章結構一般包括：1)主題內容(句)：一般文章的首句較長，要報道事件的時間、地點、人物、主要事件；2)詳細分析事件發生過程：按照時間先后順序，詳細介紹事件發展過程，其中可以穿插一些重要人物的評論和觀點；3)概括總結該事件的結局，或總結事件的重大意義和影響；如果還沒有明確的的結果，就要點明“正在調查或有待進一步調查”。

　　本文的寫作就可按照上面介紹的篇章結構進行謀篇布局：1)第一句介紹主題：中國于2024年9月25晚9點10分在四川省西昌衛星發射中心成功發射嫦娥4號載人宇宙飛船。2)詳細介紹具體情況，可以按照時間順序，包括：三名宇航員搭載飛船，實現人們登月的夢想，登月后的活動(采集研究月球表面的巖石和土壤：安裝設備，建立空間站)；黨和國家領導人做祝賀和鼓勵的講話等等。3)介紹事情的重大意義和結局，如：標志著中國科技和太空研究的重大突破；使得中國為繼美國后第二個成功登月的國家；堅定了人們發展科技、探測太空，服務于人類的信心。

　　2．分析資訊報道的語言特點，選定本文的信息表達詞句。

　　資訊報道類文章的用詞準確，有時要用到專業術語，語句一般都很長，大都為結構復雜的復合句，以便包含大量精確的信息。根據這尸特點，選定該文章的表達詞句如下：

　　【學生習作】

　　【教師點評】

　　1． 亮點點擊：該文章表達信息全面，結構基本符合資訊報道的特點和要求。另外，該資訊報道的語言準確，使用了一些結構稍復雜的句式，表達了豐富的信息，尤其是文章首句點出主題，概括性強，如：China successfully launched its another manned spacecraft at 9:10 p.m. on Sept. 25, 2024.文章還使用了非謂語動詞結構作狀語，表現了作者扎實的語言運用能力和嫻熟的表達技巧，例如：The launch marks a major breakthrough in China's space program, making China the second nation, after America in the world, to walk on the Moon.

　　2．誤點點撥：①處的come true為不及物動詞短語，不能接賓語，要改成realize。②處的encourage andcongratulate等動詞使用不準確，如果和前面的謂語動詞made并列，則要改成過去式；如果改成含有現在分詞短語的復合結構就好了，如：offering his encouragement and congramlations to those who…。

　　3．畫龍點睛： 文章的主題句之后的信息，改成一個簡單句更顯簡練，如：Three Chinese astronauts on baord will help Chinese people to relaize their dream of space-walk on the moon。2） 文章的末段表達成功發射的意義，如果其中一部分放到介紹完領導講話之后，就不顯得這么集中了。

　　【參考范文】

　　Xichang，Sichuan，Sep．25(Xinhua)－China successfully launched its another manned spacecraft, Chang'e-4 at 9:10 p.m. on Sept. 25, 2024. The three Chinese astronauts on board will help Chinese people to realize their dream of space-walk on the Moon.

　　The state and party leader delivered an important'speech, offering his encouragement and

　　congratulations to those who have devoted all their time to the exploring of and researching into the space.

　　The launch marks a major breakthrough in China's space program, making China the second nation, after America in the world, to walk on the Moon. If it goes smoothly, more research will be attempted including collecting rocks and soil on the Moon for later study. Furthermore. the astronauts will fix some equipment there for later use to set up space stations.

　　We have great confidence that China is capable of making further exploration

　　實例指導2—Life In the Future

　　寫作任務:

　　你校要舉行一次英語演講比賽,話題是"暢想未來生活,享受人生歡樂"。假設你已報名,請用英語寫一份120-150詞的演講稿,準備參加比賽。你可以從科技發展給人們未來的生活、學習和工作帶來的影響,以及如何準備迎接挑戰,適應新生活等方面展開描述和討論。

　　注意:演講稿的開頭和結尾已給出,但不計入總詞數。

　　That’s all. Thank you!

　　分析:

　　1. 仔細審題,明確任務。本寫作任務要求根據提示話題和主要信息寫一份演講稿,屬于描述類的應用文。演講稿的最大特點是其很強的實用性,這也是該類文章寫作的最基本的要求。由此,該類文章的篇章結構和語言表達顯得尤為重要,它們除了要顯示作者基本的語言基礎知識外,還要能很好地體現作者的邏輯思維和表達能力。為了便于口頭表達,該類文章的語句不要過于復雜,要盡量使用口語化的語言,這樣讀起來順口,聽起來也容易理解。

　　2. 根據提示,確定要點。該演講的主要話題首先要對"未來的生活、學習和工作等情況"加以想象和描述,并根據題目提示的"科技發展給未來生活、學習和工作帶來的影響",簡要說明其原因。文章的第二個主要內容是要表達"如何準備迎接挑戰,適應新生活",這也是個人觀點和看法的表達。要認真分析未來生活變化給我們帶來的機遇和挑戰,作為未來世界的主人,我們應該怎樣做,等等。

　　3. 遣詞造句,靈活表達。根據審題所得,將要表達的有效信息用靈活的句式表達出來,如:

　　1) 作為演講內容的總括和概述,也是文章的主題句,開篇可以表達"科技發展給未來生活、學習和工作帶來很大的影響"。可以運用如下幾個句式:

　　Thanks to the great development in science and technology, we are sure to live a happier and more wonderful life in the future. 或The great development in science and technology will have a great effect on the future of our lives, work and study.等。

　　2)仔細分析未來生活及其巨大變化時,可以從人們的衣食住行以及學習、工作等方面加以分析與描述,可以運用not only ... but also ...等來連接這些變化,例如:Not only will we be provided with enough food and clothing, we can also spend more time traveling around the world and enjoying other amusements.以及We will have less stress in the future, either from our study or from the work.等。

　　3) 在發揮個人觀點,敘述"準備迎接挑戰,適應新生活"的建議時,可以表達為:We should work harder today, making preparations to make more contributions to the development of the future society and the world.等。

　　4. 巧妙過渡,自然銜接。將表達的信息用一些過渡詞或短語連接成文,注意邏輯思維和行文的連貫。可以借鑒的表達有:further more, however, therefore, only in this way等。

　　1. 初稿的文章結構完整,謀篇布局合理,內容表達比較全面,語句間使用了一些過渡和銜接詞語,如besides、how-ever等,表達句式有幾處還算精彩,如長句As we all know, ..., so ...以及由連詞not only ... but also ...連接的并列句等的使用,表明作者有一定的英語表達能力。

　　2. 文章存在的問題:

　　①部分表達詞句過于隨意,沒有經過認真的思考和組織,甚至是按照漢語的表達習慣來安排句子結構的,例如:We will be provided not only with enough food and clothing, but also more convenience of traveling and living.第二個分句中缺少介詞with,句子顯得就不對稱,也不完整。再如,在... we will have less stress both from our study and from work, because we can work and study in a more efficient way. 一句中,both ... and ... 就不如用either ... or ...表達得更準確。

　　②文章的思想性不強,或者說思想格調比較低。特別是文章的結尾,談到未來生活的打算和建議時,僅僅滿足于個人的利益,如:develop more skills and earn more money以及enjoy a more interesting and colorful life even when we are old.等顯得作者思想很狹隘,沒有達到一定的思想境界。

　　成稿:

　　Hello, everyone! I am glad to be able to give a talk about the future life and study here. Thanks to the great development in science and technology, we are sure to live a happier and more wonderful life in the future. Not only will we be provided with enough food and clothing, we can also spend more time traveling around the world and enjoying other amusements. It will make our spare time more interesting and colorful. Furthermore, we will have less stress either from our study or from the work 實例指導3—一千年之后

　　【寫作任務】

　　科技在高速發展，人類在不斷進步。那么，一千年之后我們的生活會是什么樣子呢?請你充分展開想象，描述未來1000年后人類的生活。

　　詞數：120—150。

　　注意：開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數。

　　What may life be like on the earth in 1,000 years'time ?

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　　So I believe that the simple and effective life in the future will be much better than it is now.

　　【寫作指導】

　　仔細審題，確定文章的體裁。

　　本文是一篇描述性的說明文，要求你展開想象對未來生活進行描述。

　　2．確定文章的人稱和時態

　　本文可以第一人稱為主，敘述自己的經歷或感受；也可以第三人稱為主介紹未來生活的情況，文章可以一般現在時或一般將來時為主。

　　3．根據要點，列出提綱。

　　根據討論情況列出提綱，并運用恰當的語句表達出來。注意要保證文章通順、流暢，結構完整。

　　本文的篇章結構可以設置如下：

　　第一節：提出問題——未來生活是什么樣子的；

　　第二節：具體描繪你想象中未來生活的樣子；

　　第三節：總結全文。

　　【參考范文】

　　What may life be like on the earth in 1.000 years’s time ?

　　Supposing we are now in the year 3009, and we are going to travel to the Sahara from China. Do we need to book a ticket or should we bring enough food and water supplies? No. All that we need to do is to send everything into the computer and then get it out from the computer right at the destination. But how does that come about? It is done by the space tunnel .It is the development oftechnol ogy that makes it possible for human beings to travel everywhere.

　　Robots will be even more popular. As a result, human beings will free themselves from the physical work. But the most exciting thing is that no one will suffer from illness because there are no more diseases.

　　So I believe that the simple and effective life in the future will be much better than it is now

　　實例指導4— 月球旅行

　　【寫作任務】

　　假如你要去月球旅行，那么，在月球上的衣食住行都需要進行特殊的設計。本次寫作任務是要求你充分發揮自己的想象力，就自己這次旅行中可能遇到的問題提出解決的方案。

　　【教師點評】

　　本篇習作中作者根據寫作提示和要點基本完成了寫作任務。丈中作者使用了許多較為高級的詞匯、短語，及較復雜句式。此外，文中還使有了一些連接詞語如but，besides等，使得文章流暢、完整，體現了作者具有一定的語言運用能力。

　　當然，本文在行文中也有一些英、漢表達和詞語使用等方面的錯誤，建議修改如下：

　　語法錯誤，應改為As we all know或As is known to all…。

　　實例指導5—How to describe your future life form

　　【寫作任務】

　　某校學生會對在校學生就“未來理想的工作”這一問題做了一份調查，下表顯示了調查結果。

　　介紹圖表的全部內容并發表你的自己的看法。

　　注意：詞數120左右。

　　【思路指導】

　　對于未來和理想的描述，一方面可以開拓你豐富的想象力為你的未來運籌帷幄，激發學習的動力，另一方面也會增加我們現在生活的珍惜。需要注意以下幾點：

　　要用適當的句子引出你對未來的憧憬，切忌一開始就大談理想和未來。

　　時態要以將來時態為主。

　　描述要詳略得當，避免平均用力。

　　不要過于句式單一，要增加一定的說理性。

　　【范文欣賞】

　　The chart above shows us what kind of job the students prefer to do when they grow up. More than 25 percent of the students want to be a boss and about 25 percent of the students want to be a government official in the future.

　　While over 15 percent of the students are in favour of being a lawyer. The least number of students, less than 5 percent would like to become stars and slightly more than ten percent of them would like to be teachers. Nearly 15 percent of the students want to choose other jobs.

　　So many people want to be an official. Maybe we can get better service from the government. In my opinion, no matter what job the students would like to do it in the future, they should think about

　　making contributions to other people and to our country,

　　實例指導6----你是否愿意成為師范生寫作任務: ????今年,教育部直屬師范大學將招收一批免費師范生,學生畢業后須回生源所在省份的中小學任教十年以上。你班同學就此在英語課上進行了一次主題為"你是否愿意成為一名免費師范生"的討論,請你為此次討論寫一篇120-150詞的發言稿。

　　分析:

　　1. 本寫作任務給出了話題,同時也對體裁做出了要求,寫作前一定要注意審清題目要求,要注意發言稿的用詞和風格。

　　2. 審題之后,首先要明確提出自己的觀點:愿意成為免費師范生或是不愿意成為免費師范生；然后根據自己所持的觀點列出自己的理由,這時最好能使用一些清晰表達邏輯結構的連接詞或短語,如first, second, above all, 等等,使文章過渡自然、流暢,做到前后連貫、層次分明、有條不紊；最后,用一兩句話對全文做一個簡單的總結。

　　I have read about the news that students who want to teach in his or her hometown for at least 10 years can study at some colleges for free. If I had the chance, I would become a teacher in my hometown. ??? Firstly, to be a teacher is my dream. When I was young I admired my teacher very much and I wanted to be a teacher in the future. Secondly, this policy is very good for us, for it is free. It is very expensive for me to have college education, especially because my parents are workers, so I want to help them to save money. Thirdly, I want to get the chance to serve the people in my hometown. ???? All in all, I’m willing to teach the children and achieve my true value in my 成稿:

　　I’m glad to hear the news that our government will help students study at some colleges for free if they are willing to teach in their hometowns for at least 10 years after graduation. I hope I can get such a chance to be a teacher. ???? Firstly, to be a teacher is my dream. When I was still a kid, I admired teachers very much, and I hoped I myself could be a teacher someday. Secondly, I think I can benefit a lot from this policy, because it means that I can get a free college education. My parents are both workers and it is hard for them to earn money, so I hope I can save some money for them. Thirdly, it will be a good chance for me to work for the people in my hometown. ???? All in all, I hope I can come back to teach the children in my hometown and try to achieve my own goals as well. And I believe there will be more and more qualified teachers working in remote areas in the near future.

　　Powerful sentences:

　　1. You should devote most of your time and energy to your career, if you have a suitable one.

　　2. In my opinion, the policy is good for students and our country, and will be of great help in improving the quality of education in rural areas.

　　3. As we all know, education plays a very important role in the development of a nation.

　　4. Hard work leads to success in one’s career, while laziness results in failure.

　　實例指導7---- My dream