考研英語(yǔ)作文的范文名師批改（十二）
考研英語(yǔ)作文熱門話題范文：道德滑坡
①Looking at this thought-provoking picture symbolically depicted by the drawer, I do realize the urgency to improve the moral standards nowadays. ②A pregnant woman, an old man and his little granddaughter standson the crowded bus, looking at a young man who sits in the seat comfortably with a piece of black cloth covering his eyes, puzzled and indignant.①The temporary blind in the picture indicates a serious phenomenon in the modern society that some young people are suffering from moral decline. ②The reasons contributing to moral decline are worth pondering. ③First, respecting the old and caring the young is abandoned by some modern people, because they only care about their own benefits. ④Only if you could provide them with a great outcome,will they lend you a hand in exchange. ⑤In addition, the educational system is also to blame. ⑥It emphasizes more on high marks at the expense of having few time to teach traditional moral values in school which leads to peoples defect on this issue.①It is high time that we fostered our moral values. ②For one thing, schools and governments should play an active role in advocating moral values and traditional virtues to teach the young. ③For another, individuals should learn more about virtues and help people around with a warm heart. ④Only through our joint effort, could we recollect the virtues.
編輯點(diǎn)評(píng)
文章亮點(diǎn)：文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整，每個(gè)段落的功能基本得以體現(xiàn)。文章錯(cuò)誤：①語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤：文章出現(xiàn)了一些語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤，比如被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)、名詞單復(fù)數(shù)形式等。②句法錯(cuò)誤：有的句子表達(dá)不夠清楚。比如第一段第②句，第二段第⑤句。修改意見：文章整體結(jié)構(gòu)不錯(cuò)，但是要注意一些細(xì)節(jié)，避免不必要的錯(cuò)誤。本文中，單復(fù)數(shù)一致問(wèn)題較多，希望作者在完成習(xí)作時(shí)應(yīng)多檢查，盡量減少此類錯(cuò)誤。
考研英語(yǔ)作文熱門話題范文：道德滑坡
①Looking at this thought-provoking picture symbolically depicted by the drawer, I do realize the urgency to improve the moral standards nowadays. ②A pregnant woman, an old man and his little granddaughter standson the crowded bus, looking at a young man who sits in the seat comfortably with a piece of black cloth covering his eyes, puzzled and indignant.①The temporary blind in the picture indicates a serious phenomenon in the modern society that some young people are suffering from moral decline. ②The reasons contributing to moral decline are worth pondering. ③First, respecting the old and caring the young is abandoned by some modern people, because they only care about their own benefits. ④Only if you could provide them with a great outcome,will they lend you a hand in exchange. ⑤In addition, the educational system is also to blame. ⑥It emphasizes more on high marks at the expense of having few time to teach traditional moral values in school which leads to peoples defect on this issue.①It is high time that we fostered our moral values. ②For one thing, schools and governments should play an active role in advocating moral values and traditional virtues to teach the young. ③For another, individuals should learn more about virtues and help people around with a warm heart. ④Only through our joint effort, could we recollect the virtues.
編輯點(diǎn)評(píng)
文章亮點(diǎn)：文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整，每個(gè)段落的功能基本得以體現(xiàn)。文章錯(cuò)誤：①語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤：文章出現(xiàn)了一些語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤，比如被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)、名詞單復(fù)數(shù)形式等。②句法錯(cuò)誤：有的句子表達(dá)不夠清楚。比如第一段第②句，第二段第⑤句。修改意見：文章整體結(jié)構(gòu)不錯(cuò)，但是要注意一些細(xì)節(jié)，避免不必要的錯(cuò)誤。本文中，單復(fù)數(shù)一致問(wèn)題較多，希望作者在完成習(xí)作時(shí)應(yīng)多檢查，盡量減少此類錯(cuò)誤。
