12月英語(yǔ)四六級(jí)寫(xiě)作中的簡(jiǎn)潔美

　　好的寫(xiě)作，首先而且至關(guān)重要的一點(diǎn)就是簡(jiǎn)潔。繁冗的寫(xiě)作堆砌了許多無(wú)用的詞藻，反而減弱表述的清晰度。當(dāng)然，也不能僅僅因?yàn)楹?jiǎn)短就認(rèn)為短句一定優(yōu)于長(zhǎng)句。只要一個(gè)單詞確實(shí)能起到一定的作用，它就應(yīng)該留在句中。一般來(lái)說(shuō)，只有在進(jìn)行強(qiáng)調(diào)或修飾、美化句子時(shí)，才能使用重復(fù)的單詞、語(yǔ)音和短語(yǔ)。修改文章，就是要?jiǎng)h繁就簡(jiǎn)。比較下面這對(duì)句子，注意體會(huì)二者的差別及效果。

　　1) Dr. Sun Yat-sen went to Japan by means of a big boat.

　　2) Dr. Sun Yat-sen went to Japan by boat.

　　斜體字部分較啰嗦，因?yàn)閎y就是by means of boat。

　　請(qǐng)看下列例句

　　Wordy: It makes me feel painful to think that she has to work 12 hours a day and seven days a week.

　　Better: It pains me to think that she has to work 12 hours a day and seven days a week.

　　Wordy: It will be our aim to ensure proper health care for each and every one of the Chinese people.

　　Better: Our aim is to ensure proper health care for all Chinese.

　　Wordy: This book will help you master the basic elements of good writing.

　　Better: This book will help you master the basics of good writing.

　　Wordy: The search of the forest that they conducted was entirely complete.

　　Better: The search of the forest was complete.

　　或They conducted a complete search of the forest.

　　第二個(gè)句子合乎漢語(yǔ)表達(dá)習(xí)慣，即他們對(duì)森林進(jìn)行了徹底的搜查。

　　Wordy: He has no sense of principles, whether he is in public or in private.

　　Better: He has no principles, public or private.

　　Wordy: Whenever anyone telephoned her to ask her for help with their homework she always obliged right away.

　　Better: She immediately obliged anyone who telephoned for help with homework.

　　Wordy: In a cautious manner the car went around the corner.

　　Better: The car negotiated the corner.

　　Wordy: If the government agency finds that an individual has received a payment to which the individual was not entitled, whether or not the payment was due to the individuals fault or misrepresentation, the individual shall be liable to repay to the government the total sum of the payment to which the individual was not entitled.

　　Better: If the government agency finds that you received a payment that you werent entitled to, you must pay the entire sum back.

　　Wordy: Another important aspect is good health. It is one of our great blessings. It may be achieved through proper diet and exercise. Rest is also desirable.

　　Better: The great blessing of good health may be had through proper diet, exercise, and rest.

　　好的寫(xiě)作，首先而且至關(guān)重要的一點(diǎn)就是簡(jiǎn)潔。繁冗的寫(xiě)作堆砌了許多無(wú)用的詞藻，反而減弱表述的清晰度。當(dāng)然，也不能僅僅因?yàn)楹?jiǎn)短就認(rèn)為短句一定優(yōu)于長(zhǎng)句。只要一個(gè)單詞確實(shí)能起到一定的作用，它就應(yīng)該留在句中。一般來(lái)說(shuō)，只有在進(jìn)行強(qiáng)調(diào)或修飾、美化句子時(shí)，才能使用重復(fù)的單詞、語(yǔ)音和短語(yǔ)。修改文章，就是要?jiǎng)h繁就簡(jiǎn)。比較下面這對(duì)句子，注意體會(huì)二者的差別及效果。

　　1) Dr. Sun Yat-sen went to Japan by means of a big boat.

　　2) Dr. Sun Yat-sen went to Japan by boat.

　　斜體字部分較啰嗦，因?yàn)閎y就是by means of boat。

　　請(qǐng)看下列例句

　　Wordy: It makes me feel painful to think that she has to work 12 hours a day and seven days a week.

　　Better: It pains me to think that she has to work 12 hours a day and seven days a week.

　　Wordy: It will be our aim to ensure proper health care for each and every one of the Chinese people.

　　Better: Our aim is to ensure proper health care for all Chinese.

　　Wordy: This book will help you master the basic elements of good writing.

　　Better: This book will help you master the basics of good writing.

　　Wordy: The search of the forest that they conducted was entirely complete.

　　Better: The search of the forest was complete.

　　或They conducted a complete search of the forest.

　　第二個(gè)句子合乎漢語(yǔ)表達(dá)習(xí)慣，即他們對(duì)森林進(jìn)行了徹底的搜查。

　　Wordy: He has no sense of principles, whether he is in public or in private.

　　Better: He has no principles, public or private.

　　Wordy: Whenever anyone telephoned her to ask her for help with their homework she always obliged right away.

　　Better: She immediately obliged anyone who telephoned for help with homework.

　　Wordy: In a cautious manner the car went around the corner.

　　Better: The car negotiated the corner.

　　Wordy: If the government agency finds that an individual has received a payment to which the individual was not entitled, whether or not the payment was due to the individuals fault or misrepresentation, the individual shall be liable to repay to the government the total sum of the payment to which the individual was not entitled.

　　Better: If the government agency finds that you received a payment that you werent entitled to, you must pay the entire sum back.

　　Wordy: Another important aspect is good health. It is one of our great blessings. It may be achieved through proper diet and exercise. Rest is also desirable.

　　Better: The great blessing of good health may be had through proper diet, exercise, and rest.