GRE作文入門和進階二十二
（范文）
Once I participated a speech given by a famous local entrepreneur， who rose from exactly bare hands. The word brands me most is loyalty， the very one we hardly dabble and almost reaches the edge of oblivion but instead no negligence is deserve. How can this concept bridge the relation with the huge lope of his life？ Loyalty makes one stick to a goal without any fickleness until achievement， which has won a lot much for him including friendship， dependability and love. Ironically， todays people is becoming more and more sagacious to plan for themselves better， holding the principles of choosing best， moving fastest， and snatching most； in other words， loyalty is degenerated into a totem of stubborn stereotype inadaptable for the society of profits first.
Is that modern theory true？ And what about the success of that admiring entrepreneur？ Something people primarily should understand is the indispensability of credence active among human community for the perpetuity of humanistic relationship， which to a large extent stems from this loyalty. No exaggeration I have made to emphasize its paramount function to personal survival， either from the fable or history we can learn the lesson. But now I would like to continue to elicit the example of that manager upstairs. When he is still an employee working for this consult company （before he climbed up to the top rung of the company committee）， there was a huge recession leading to a total profits declination in this operating domain， in the end results almost all elites of the company to make a job exchange except him. His persistent determination was for nothing but loyalty， of his indebtedness form his boss， of his enamored undertaking tolerating for no intermittence， of his adherence to goal successful for sure. And fact tells us everything， as each audience can see， he did.
Not only to individual the quality of loyalty can push one into the acme of his career following with winsome reputation， but also to community the crucial pillar to support the sculpture of serenity goddess. Once separated from the loyalty， credence also accordingly right away being crushed under the wheels of history cart， and then the concomitant condition can be imagined as this： various associations would be certainly collapsed under the circumstance deprived of dependability， each one discredits the motive of action from anyone else， talking is evolved into a serial of satirical assaults， compassion sounds more like a snicker， and ultimately ineluctably the human society is degraded into a state of depravity. Is this the community we each of us want to live in？ Is this the situation we each of us want to make realized？ If your answer is negative-just like mine-then please retrospect your conscience to retrieve this precious virtue of loyalty。
While the merits of loyalty have been corroborated here so strongly， admittedly， however， loyalty applied only to the legitimate partner or purpose， not involves the malign ones， somehow or other the effect will surely arrive at the surprising reverse. For instance， from the point of penal law， excluding the major miscreants who abet the underlings to commit guilt， the adherent to follow his felony， even if he never directly join in the crime doing on the spot， but as a result of his ancillary work， he should also assume a certain quantity of the great responsibility， which might mean him a ferocity of being disenfranchised， or at the same time to enjoy his later few years prime time in the jail. The tragedy is so natural for most of us that admonishing clock is being struck； the high time for us to wake up from the sequacious loyalty is coming.
Overall， the virtue of loyalty is one of the fundamental factor heading for our prosperous tomorrow， despite its contain of some potential stygian side effect turning to the malicious dimension， yet no doubt it deserves to be advocated to learn for the brace of the beneficial development of both single person and gross society. Like the rationale of any medicine we take normally， no one of us will stop to ingest pills of penicillin just because its possible allergy to some particular patients， after all its application and efficacy is indelible. （700 words）
點評：這篇文章二段直接闡述原因，三段論述必要性，四段對其中的例外進行彌補，客觀地指出非通用性，從而保證了全文強大的說服力。
（范文）
Once I participated a speech given by a famous local entrepreneur， who rose from exactly bare hands. The word brands me most is loyalty， the very one we hardly dabble and almost reaches the edge of oblivion but instead no negligence is deserve. How can this concept bridge the relation with the huge lope of his life？ Loyalty makes one stick to a goal without any fickleness until achievement， which has won a lot much for him including friendship， dependability and love. Ironically， todays people is becoming more and more sagacious to plan for themselves better， holding the principles of choosing best， moving fastest， and snatching most； in other words， loyalty is degenerated into a totem of stubborn stereotype inadaptable for the society of profits first.
Is that modern theory true？ And what about the success of that admiring entrepreneur？ Something people primarily should understand is the indispensability of credence active among human community for the perpetuity of humanistic relationship， which to a large extent stems from this loyalty. No exaggeration I have made to emphasize its paramount function to personal survival， either from the fable or history we can learn the lesson. But now I would like to continue to elicit the example of that manager upstairs. When he is still an employee working for this consult company （before he climbed up to the top rung of the company committee）， there was a huge recession leading to a total profits declination in this operating domain， in the end results almost all elites of the company to make a job exchange except him. His persistent determination was for nothing but loyalty， of his indebtedness form his boss， of his enamored undertaking tolerating for no intermittence， of his adherence to goal successful for sure. And fact tells us everything， as each audience can see， he did.
Not only to individual the quality of loyalty can push one into the acme of his career following with winsome reputation， but also to community the crucial pillar to support the sculpture of serenity goddess. Once separated from the loyalty， credence also accordingly right away being crushed under the wheels of history cart， and then the concomitant condition can be imagined as this： various associations would be certainly collapsed under the circumstance deprived of dependability， each one discredits the motive of action from anyone else， talking is evolved into a serial of satirical assaults， compassion sounds more like a snicker， and ultimately ineluctably the human society is degraded into a state of depravity. Is this the community we each of us want to live in？ Is this the situation we each of us want to make realized？ If your answer is negative-just like mine-then please retrospect your conscience to retrieve this precious virtue of loyalty。
While the merits of loyalty have been corroborated here so strongly， admittedly， however， loyalty applied only to the legitimate partner or purpose， not involves the malign ones， somehow or other the effect will surely arrive at the surprising reverse. For instance， from the point of penal law， excluding the major miscreants who abet the underlings to commit guilt， the adherent to follow his felony， even if he never directly join in the crime doing on the spot， but as a result of his ancillary work， he should also assume a certain quantity of the great responsibility， which might mean him a ferocity of being disenfranchised， or at the same time to enjoy his later few years prime time in the jail. The tragedy is so natural for most of us that admonishing clock is being struck； the high time for us to wake up from the sequacious loyalty is coming.
Overall， the virtue of loyalty is one of the fundamental factor heading for our prosperous tomorrow， despite its contain of some potential stygian side effect turning to the malicious dimension， yet no doubt it deserves to be advocated to learn for the brace of the beneficial development of both single person and gross society. Like the rationale of any medicine we take normally， no one of us will stop to ingest pills of penicillin just because its possible allergy to some particular patients， after all its application and efficacy is indelible. （700 words）
點評：這篇文章二段直接闡述原因，三段論述必要性，四段對其中的例外進行彌補，客觀地指出非通用性，從而保證了全文強大的說服力。
