高中英語(yǔ)語(yǔ)法-習(xí)作評(píng)析（5）
習(xí)作評(píng)析（5）
假若一個(gè)新西蘭教育參觀團(tuán)要到你校訪問(wèn) ， 他們想了解中國(guó)教育的基本情況，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下圖表和所給提示，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇 120 字左右的短文，為來(lái)客介紹當(dāng)今中國(guó)教育的基本情況。
1. 提示詞：（ 1 ） compulsory education －義務(wù)教育；（ 2 ） junior middle school －初中；（ 3 ） senior middle school －高中；（ 4 ） professional school －職業(yè)學(xué)校。
2. 短文須包括以下要點(diǎn)：
在高校，部分費(fèi)用由家庭承擔(dān)；中國(guó)教育盡管成績(jī)巨大，但需要改革。
學(xué)生原文
Education System in China Today
Education in China today has been developing rapidly. In many provinces， it is compulsory and free. Most children are started school by the age of six. They spend five or six years in primary school and three years of junior middle school， which are compulsory education.
After that， some can attend professional school for two to three years before work. Some will attend senior middle school for three years. Students have to pass by a series of examination before enter a college or university. The college or university life lasts two to four years. Now part of the costs are provided with their families， although students can get the support from the college. After they graduate， they can go and find jobs.
Though China have taken place great changes in the fields of education， there are a great deal to be improved.
名師點(diǎn)評(píng)：
這是一篇說(shuō)明文，考生能夠根據(jù)圖表的順序和所給提示，比較條理地?cái)⑹鲋袊?guó)的教育基本情況，內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)齊全，能靈活運(yùn)用所學(xué)詞匯，語(yǔ)言較為生動(dòng)，如：現(xiàn)在完成進(jìn)行時(shí)的運(yùn)用，非限定性定語(yǔ)從句的運(yùn)用等。
文中個(gè)別地方內(nèi)容重復(fù)，如：第二句（ In many provinces， it is compulsory and free. ）多余，且不知所云，文中最后一句出現(xiàn)了漢語(yǔ)式的英語(yǔ)。個(gè)別句子產(chǎn)生主謂不一致的錯(cuò)誤，有的地方介詞搭配欠佳，現(xiàn)分別分析如下：
（ 1 ）第二句多余。
?。?2 ） are started 改為 start .
（ 3 ） of 改為 in ，因?yàn)?spend 與 in 搭配。
（ 4 ）去掉 will ，全文用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)介紹中國(guó)的教育情況。
（ 5 ） pass by 改為 pass . pass by 意為經(jīng)過(guò)、路過(guò)， pass 在此意為通過(guò)、（考試）過(guò)關(guān)
（ 6 ） enter 改為 entering . before 如果作介詞用，后接動(dòng)詞的 -ing 形式，如果作連詞用，后接從句，應(yīng)該改為 they enters .
?。?7 ） costs are 改為 cost is .做費(fèi)用解，是不可數(shù)名詞后接動(dòng)詞的單數(shù)形式。
?。?8 ） provided with 改為 provided by .
?。?9 ）最后一句 Though China has taken great changes ， there are a great deal 考生受漢語(yǔ)思維的影響，應(yīng)該改為 Though great changes have taken place in China ， there is much 。
精品范文：
Education System in China Today
Education in China today has been developing rapidly. Most children start school by the age of six. They spend five or six years in primary school and three years in junior middle school， which are compulsory education.
After that， some can attend professional school for two to three years before work. Some attend senior middle school for three years. Students have to pass a series of examinations before entering a college or university. The college or university life lasts two to four years. Now part of the cost is provided by with their families， although students can get the support from the college. After they graduate， they can go and find jobs.
Though great changes have taken place in the fields of education in China， there is still much to be improved.
習(xí)作評(píng)析（5）
假若一個(gè)新西蘭教育參觀團(tuán)要到你校訪問(wèn) ， 他們想了解中國(guó)教育的基本情況，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下圖表和所給提示，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇 120 字左右的短文，為來(lái)客介紹當(dāng)今中國(guó)教育的基本情況。
1. 提示詞：（ 1 ） compulsory education －義務(wù)教育；（ 2 ） junior middle school －初中；（ 3 ） senior middle school －高中；（ 4 ） professional school －職業(yè)學(xué)校。
2. 短文須包括以下要點(diǎn)：
在高校，部分費(fèi)用由家庭承擔(dān)；中國(guó)教育盡管成績(jī)巨大，但需要改革。
學(xué)生原文
Education System in China Today
Education in China today has been developing rapidly. In many provinces， it is compulsory and free. Most children are started school by the age of six. They spend five or six years in primary school and three years of junior middle school， which are compulsory education.
After that， some can attend professional school for two to three years before work. Some will attend senior middle school for three years. Students have to pass by a series of examination before enter a college or university. The college or university life lasts two to four years. Now part of the costs are provided with their families， although students can get the support from the college. After they graduate， they can go and find jobs.
Though China have taken place great changes in the fields of education， there are a great deal to be improved.
名師點(diǎn)評(píng)：
這是一篇說(shuō)明文，考生能夠根據(jù)圖表的順序和所給提示，比較條理地?cái)⑹鲋袊?guó)的教育基本情況，內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)齊全，能靈活運(yùn)用所學(xué)詞匯，語(yǔ)言較為生動(dòng)，如：現(xiàn)在完成進(jìn)行時(shí)的運(yùn)用，非限定性定語(yǔ)從句的運(yùn)用等。
文中個(gè)別地方內(nèi)容重復(fù)，如：第二句（ In many provinces， it is compulsory and free. ）多余，且不知所云，文中最后一句出現(xiàn)了漢語(yǔ)式的英語(yǔ)。個(gè)別句子產(chǎn)生主謂不一致的錯(cuò)誤，有的地方介詞搭配欠佳，現(xiàn)分別分析如下：
?。?1 ）第二句多余。
（ 2 ） are started 改為 start .
（ 3 ） of 改為 in ，因?yàn)?spend 與 in 搭配。
（ 4 ）去掉 will ，全文用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)介紹中國(guó)的教育情況。
（ 5 ） pass by 改為 pass . pass by 意為經(jīng)過(guò)、路過(guò)， pass 在此意為通過(guò)、（考試）過(guò)關(guān)
?。?6 ） enter 改為 entering . before 如果作介詞用，后接動(dòng)詞的 -ing 形式，如果作連詞用，后接從句，應(yīng)該改為 they enters .
（ 7 ） costs are 改為 cost is .做費(fèi)用解，是不可數(shù)名詞后接動(dòng)詞的單數(shù)形式。
?。?8 ） provided with 改為 provided by .
（ 9 ）最后一句 Though China has taken great changes ， there are a great deal 考生受漢語(yǔ)思維的影響，應(yīng)該改為 Though great changes have taken place in China ， there is much 。
精品范文：
Education System in China Today
Education in China today has been developing rapidly. Most children start school by the age of six. They spend five or six years in primary school and three years in junior middle school， which are compulsory education.
After that， some can attend professional school for two to three years before work. Some attend senior middle school for three years. Students have to pass a series of examinations before entering a college or university. The college or university life lasts two to four years. Now part of the cost is provided by with their families， although students can get the support from the college. After they graduate， they can go and find jobs.
Though great changes have taken place in the fields of education in China， there is still much to be improved.
