Native Speaker的雅思寫作9分范文賞析

　　中國人寫的雅思作文有結構但語言不夠地道;native speaker寫的文章夠地道，但不夠雅思!因此，市面上總找不到完美的雅思例文。

　　此次，我特別邀請我的美國朋友按照我的要求寫了一些文章，這里逐一貼出來，讓大家分享一下，呵呵。。。

　　Children who grow up in families which are short of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

　　Some feel that the children of low income families are better equipped to deal with difficulties posed by the real world when they grow up and they also believe the privileged children of wealthy families are less fit to deal with these difficulties . The implications and veracity of this argument seem self-evident, but in fact require closer examination.

　　點評： 1+ 1 模式，最后 1 句為主題句。此段的主題句稍微有點特殊，它的確否定了前面所提到的觀點，從而表達出了自己的觀點，此外還引出了下文。特別是最后半句： but in fact require closer examination ，感覺是在拋磚引玉。

　　The popular wisdom is that children of poorer families learn early on the value of a buck, and are thus naturally better suited to stretching moneywhen times get tough in adulthood. Inversely, the children of wealthy families, thoseborn with a silver spoon in their mouths, are believed to be completely ignorant of the value of money, having had everything provided for them in their youth and oftentimes erroneously expecting the same situation in adulthood. They are believed to be prone to overspending and financial irresponsibility. This belief, though logical, overlooks one key point which is , of course, education.

　　A poor child may believe that one can get along, if not as easily, without wealth. A wealthy child may be well trained by a parent steeped in the knowledge of money management; the key to developing this skill is education.

　　點評：最后一段有點像是提出解決這個問題的辦法，即 education. 它沒有像傳統的結尾段那樣簡單的重申自己的觀點。

　　總結之總結：

　　全文的觀點有待揣摩，作者很明顯是不贊成題目的說法，即 Children who grow up in families which are short of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents. 但是作者自己是更偏向窮人家的孩子呢，還是富人家的孩子呢?!根據文章來看，作者是中立，他所看重的是他們所接受的教育。In other words，整篇文章又是一次中立的寫法。在雅思考試中，這種寫法經常使用，還是非常實用的，大家可以學習一下。此外，文章中有很多好詞好句，特別是長句，值得模仿一下。

　　此文9分。

　　中國人寫的雅思作文有結構但語言不夠地道;native speaker寫的文章夠地道，但不夠雅思!因此，市面上總找不到完美的雅思例文。

　　此次，我特別邀請我的美國朋友按照我的要求寫了一些文章，這里逐一貼出來，讓大家分享一下，呵呵。。。

　　Children who grow up in families which are short of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

　　Some feel that the children of low income families are better equipped to deal with difficulties posed by the real world when they grow up and they also believe the privileged children of wealthy families are less fit to deal with these difficulties . The implications and veracity of this argument seem self-evident, but in fact require closer examination.

　　點評： 1+ 1 模式，最后 1 句為主題句。此段的主題句稍微有點特殊，它的確否定了前面所提到的觀點，從而表達出了自己的觀點，此外還引出了下文。特別是最后半句： but in fact require closer examination ，感覺是在拋磚引玉。

　　The popular wisdom is that children of poorer families learn early on the value of a buck, and are thus naturally better suited to stretching moneywhen times get tough in adulthood. Inversely, the children of wealthy families, thoseborn with a silver spoon in their mouths, are believed to be completely ignorant of the value of money, having had everything provided for them in their youth and oftentimes erroneously expecting the same situation in adulthood. They are believed to be prone to overspending and financial irresponsibility. This belief, though logical, overlooks one key point which is , of course, education.

　　A poor child may believe that one can get along, if not as easily, without wealth. A wealthy child may be well trained by a parent steeped in the knowledge of money management; the key to developing this skill is education.

　　點評：最后一段有點像是提出解決這個問題的辦法，即 education. 它沒有像傳統的結尾段那樣簡單的重申自己的觀點。

　　總結之總結：

　　全文的觀點有待揣摩，作者很明顯是不贊成題目的說法，即 Children who grow up in families which are short of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents. 但是作者自己是更偏向窮人家的孩子呢，還是富人家的孩子呢?!根據文章來看，作者是中立，他所看重的是他們所接受的教育。In other words，整篇文章又是一次中立的寫法。在雅思考試中，這種寫法經常使用，還是非常實用的，大家可以學習一下。此外，文章中有很多好詞好句，特別是長句，值得模仿一下。

　　此文9分。