湖南省長沙縣實驗中學2024屆高三英語二輪復習書面表達復習重點話題指導專題09 科技發明話題指導（教師版）

　　【寫作任務】

　　請你根據以下信息提示，介紹一款時尚手機。詞數120一lS0左右。

　　1．作為高科技產品使用；這款手機在國內外被廣泛地使用。

　　2．主要功能：通話、發短信、上網、照相、玩游戲等。

　　3．體積小，重量輕易攜帶：適用于各年齡段人群。

　　下面我就來教你產品推銷廣告的五步寫法，打造產品推銷廣告吧。

　　第一步： 開頭一定要有吸引力和誘惑力，能一下子吸引消費者的注意力，好的開頭是作文成功的關鍵(此類作文有時有題目，如：Abrief IntroductiontO HaierGroup，有時也可以省略)。

　　第二步：一旦抓住了讀者的注意力，就該趁熱打鐵勸服他們買自己的產品。介紹產品必須要緊緊圍繞開頭所提出的引人之處。只說“最好”、“最新”是沒什么實際意義的。應該強調特性、質量、原材料，以及和同類產品相比最出彩的地方。

　　第三步： 通過產品介紹激起讀者的購買欲望后，就該進一步加強讀者購買的決心了。你可以詳細說明并保證產品會給讀者帶來的好處。

　　第四步： 到了這一步，所有的努力都指向一個目標：促使客戶采取行動、購買產品。這時語氣要禮delay(拖延)；contact(聯系)

　　●句型搜索：1etme introduce．．．(讓我介紹……)；bemadein…(產于……)；be conve—

　　【參考范文】

　　Being a product of high-technology, this mobile phones are being more and more widely used. They are perhaps the most popular means of communication all over the world today. They are small in size. light in weight and easy to carry, offering fast and convenient services for communication. They are can be used m do all kinds of things for communication and entertainment.

　　The users use them for calling, sending short messages and Internet-surfing. Besides, they can be used to take photos and when you are flee. you can enjoy exciting games.

　　This mobile phone is suitable for people of all ages and all models are available.

　　實例指導2—Information Age

　　在互聯網高速發展和普及的同時,"網絡成癮癥"也隨之出現,在青少年中表現得尤其突出,這影響了他們正常的學習、工作和家庭生活,也不利于他們的健康。請根據下面兩幅圖的內容,寫一篇120-150詞的英語短文,談談自己的看法和觀點,并提出科學合理的處理意見和建議。

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　　參考詞匯:成癮be addicted to

　　容的描述與分析。(2)"網絡成癮癥"的出現及其影響。(3)個人見解和建議。

　　4. 確定詞句,連句成文定稿。對于話題的引入,可以從圖畫描述開始,用As we can see from the pictures, ...作為文章的開始；對于現象的成因及其影響的分析,可以從文字提示"互聯網高速發展和普及,網絡成癮癥出現"開始,用With the rapid development and popularity of the Internet ...來表達；提出個人見解和建議,可以使用:in my opinion, as far as I’m concerned, I think等。同時還要注意文章中句子之間的銜接和過渡。

　　Internet in a proper way, for example, to search for useful information. On the other hand, limit their time on the Internet. Only in this way people can make full use of it to make our country develop quicker.

　　成稿:

　　As we can see from the pictures, some children are so addicted to the Internet that they would rather die than stop surfing the Internet. Others spend all their time on the Internet and they forget all about food and rest. However, they refuse to take any other people’s advice, including their parents’.

　　With the rapid development and popularity of the Internet, many people, especially the youth, are addicted to it, which affects their studies and work, and sometimes even destroys their family life. Worse still, it is not good for their health, mentally and physically.

　　In my opinion, people should make full use of the Internet, searching for useful information. On the other hand, we should use it in a proper way. Don’t waste too much time on it. At the same time, teachers and parents should take measures to educate and protect the youth against the harm caused by it.

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　　Powerful sentences:

　　實例指導3—Science and Technology

　　人類對外部空間的著迷已有上千年的歷史了。一直以來人們對空間探索有兩種相反的看法。有的人認為探索外部空間是浪費時間和金錢,資金投入巨大,而收獲甚微；而另一些人卻認為人類可以得益于空間研究。請你以"Do We Need Space Exploration？"為題, 就我們是否需要太空探索為主題發表自己的看法。詞數:不少于130。

　　1. 首先要對所給出的提示材料進行分析,材料已經指出對探索空間有兩種相反的看法,因此我們在審題的時候,腦子里就有一個文章的大體框架:首先就是擺出這兩種相反的觀點,分別對這兩種相反的觀點給以描述,適當運用例證來分別論述。最后,也是這篇習作點睛的地方,就是給出自己的觀點,并加以論證。

　　2. 在組織文章結構時,不妨可以將其分為三部分:第一部分引入事實。第二部分分別論述正面反面觀點。第三部分論述自己的觀點。

　　3. 文章在行文上要保持連貫,通常在正反觀點交替時使用一些連詞,如:on the other hand, on the contrary,使正反兩種觀點形成鮮明對比。在擺出自己觀點的時候也要適當過渡,承上啟下提出自己的觀點。

　　初稿:

　　we will benefit from space exploration in the future. Therefore, I’m definitely in favor of exploring outer space, and of course, our scientific knowledge is becoming greater and greater.

　　1. 這篇文章段落結構還算比較完整。文章第一段從事實引入要討論的話題；第二段提出兩種對立的觀點并加以具體論述；第三段提出自己的觀點并展望前景。語言比較通順、并運用了復雜的句式。在文章銜接的地方也使用了meanwhile, however,as far as I’m concerned這樣的承接詞語。

　　2. 文章不足之處在于:

　　①沒有真正參透主題,題目是"Do We Need Space Exploration？",所以應著重強化正面觀點(自己的觀點),以便突出主題——到底需不需要太空探索。而作者把文章當成了對比觀點的文章了,在第二段中詳細論述了這兩種相反的觀點,導致主題不突出。

　　②結構雖然完整,但應把個人支持的觀點獨成一段,這樣更能突出地針對問題加以論述。

　　成稿:

　　Man has been fascinated by outer space for thousands of years. It has been almost forty years since man’s first landing on the moon. ???? Now, some people believe that space exploration is a sheer waste of time and money. They point out the fact that it cost billions of dollars to carry on space re-search, but little information was brought back. However, every coin has two sides. There are still a number of other people who believe that space exploration has more advantages. ???? In my opinion I believe that it will bring more benefits to the people. Many new products, such as weather and communication satellites, are also products of space programs, and they have benefited people all over the world. And what’s more, scientific knowledge about outer space has been acquired by mankind.

　　實例指導4—On the Interne

　　【寫作任務】

　　在人們的日常生活中，互聯網起著越來越重要的作用。請根據下表所給提示，為某英文雜志社寫一篇On the Internet的征文稿。

　　信息 看國內外資訊、獲取各種有用信息、下載學術資料等

　　通訊 可以發電子郵件、打電話等

　　學習

　　創造學習機會，如上網上大學、閱讀各種書籍、自學外語等。

　　娛樂 欣賞音樂、觀看體育比賽、玩棋牌游戲。

　　生活

　　購物、聊天、交友等。

　　結論

　　注意：

　　1．征文稿必須包括表內所有信息，且行文連貫、通順；

　　2．詞數：120詞左右；

　　3．開頭已給出，不計入總詞數。

　　On the Internet

　　The Internet is playing a more and more important part in our life…

　　【寫作指導】

　　題目要求以On the Internet為題寫一篇征文稿，實際上是一篇說明文，主要介紹因特網的用途。此文可以安排一個段落，一氣呵成；也可以安排兩個段落，先介紹用途，最后用一兩個句子進行簡單地總結。由于說明文以客觀介紹為主，因而以使用一般現在時為主。此文所涉及的詞匯和短語有：

　　1．1earn news both at home and abroad

　　2．have／gain access tO useful information

　　3．download some academic data

　　[組詞成句]使用上述詞匯和短語將各項要點表達出來，可以使用多種手段來避免句式單一，如定語從句、介訶短語等。還要注意某些漢語要點用英語可以有多種表達法，此時可以盡量使用較高級的表達方式，如“獲取信息”可以使用have access to information 或get information來表達，顯然前者更高級，語言表達效果更佳。

　　1. We can learn news both at home and abroad and have access to all kinds of useful information as well.

　　2. We can even download some academic data.

　　3. The Internet is also a popular means of communication, through which we can send emails and make phone calls.

　　4.

　　The

　　Internet

　　creates

　　learning opportunities, such as going to net universities, reading various kinds of books and learning foreign languages by ourselves.

　　5. We can enjoy music , watch sports matches and play chess or cards.

　　6. We can. even shop on the net, chat with others and make friends with them.

　　7. The Internet has made our lives more colourful.

　　8. How fantastic it is!

　　[組句成篇]此文要表達的并列信息較多，因而組句成文時要特別注意前后信息內容的銜接，可使用恰當的銜接詞語，如meanwhile，besides，also，through，moreover，such as，last but not the least，in a word等，這樣可以使信息之間的層次更清晰、更分明。

　　【學生習作】

　　On the Internet

　　The Internet is playing a more and more important part in our life. On the net, we can learn news both at home and abroad and have access to all kinds of Useful information as well.

　　Meanwhile, we can download some academic data. Besides, the Internet is also a popular means of communication, through which we can

　　send

　　emails

　　and

　　make

　　phone

　　calls.

　　Moreover, the Internet creates learning opportunities, such as going to net universities, reading various kinds of books and learning foreign languages by ourselves. We can enjoy music, watch sports matches and play chess or cards. Last but not the least, we can even shop on the net, chat with other people and make friends with them.

　　In a word, the Internet has made our a lot more colourful. How fantastic it is!

　　實例指導5— 如何看待青少年上網現象

　　本周班會的主題是“你如何看待青少年上網現象？”假設你本人贊同青少年上網，請根據下表所列的上網益處及友情提示寫一篇發言稿。詞數：150左右。

　　益處 友情提示

　　1. 獲取資訊，搜索信息；?

　　2. 收發郵件；?

　　3. 上網校聽課，下載學習資料；

　　4. 聽音樂、網上購物，節省時間，豐富課余生活；

　　5. 為工作中所需的電腦技能打下基礎。 1. 不要迷戀網絡游戲；

　　2. 遠離不良網站；

　　3. 對陌生人要保持警惕。

　　成稿:

　　As we all know, the Internet plays an important role in our lives and in my opinion, we teenagers can benefit a lot from it. We can read news from every part of the world and get useful information online. We can send e-mails to our family as well as to our friends no matter where they are. We can also study at home with a computer by attending an online school and downloading study materials. We can also listen to music and shop online, which can save us a lot of time and make our life more colorful. Finally, we can prepare for our future work well by improving our ability to operate computers. ????But we shouldn’t play Internet games too much, we should keep away from harmful websites and be careful when talking with strangers online. That’s all. Thank you!

　　Powerful sentences:

　　1. Students can get a lot of new information online.

　　2. As we all know, the Internet plays an important role in our daily lives.

　　3. Finally, we can prepare for future work well by improving our ability to operate computers.

　　4. We should keep away from harmful websites and be careful when talking with strangers online.

　　實例指導5—看電視利？弊？

　　要求寫一篇關于看電視有利有弊的文章，要求字數在80-100之間。

　　要寫出自己的見解。

　　Is Watching TV a Good Thing?

　　①Television has changed??people’s life much since it was invented. Now it has become one important part of modern life.

　　People②enjoy themselves after hard work by watching TV. They can see some plays, some stories, some ③sports matches without going out of home, and without spending much money in buying tickets. TV programmes make people’s life??more interesting. People can ④learn much from TV, students can study by watching some educational programmes. People can see news, weather reports, programmes about science and computers. People all over the world can learn from each other and get knowledge when they are watching TV.

　　But not all the programmes are good enough. Today, there are too much programmes about love and crime. Some students become bad because they learn from the bad people in those programmes. And watching TV

　　usually takes too much time.??It’s not good for people’s work and study. It’s not good for their eyes, either. People all over the world are watching TV. Is watching TV a good thing or a bad one?I think it depends on people themselves. If one can choose good programmes and he doesn’t spend??too much time on TV, it can be a good thing for him. 實戰演練

　　?假設將來有一天能讓你擁有一種超能來幫助那些需要幫助的人,你希望是什么樣的能力？為什么？請據此寫一篇文章,向某科技英語雜志社投稿,題目自擬。(詞數:120左右)

　　My Wish Computers have developed very quickly and have greatly changed our lives. Maybe one day I will be able to enter other people’s dreams and communicate with them with the help of computers. Many people who have been badly injured in accidents cannot speak, hear or move. They accept their families’ care but they cannot

　　communicate with them. Both the patients and the families are suffering, especially the patients who are very lonely. I would enter the patients’ dreams, tell them that their families care about them and listen to the patients. Then I would go to tell their families the thoughts of the patients. It would be an honor for me to do these kinds of things.

　　Of course, I would not enter other people’s dreams without permission, since people need to have their own personal space.

　　網絡在給我們帶來方便的同時，也引發了很多問題。簡要描述該漫畫內容，并就此現象發表議論。詞數：120－150

　　http://www.people.com.cn/GB/paper69/17239/1511131.html

　　Just as the picture shows, Internet is like a real net, which lures lots of people into it who can not break away though attempting to. On one hand, internet makes many things possible, such as chatting whenever and wherever you like, looking up information at a high speed. On the other hand, a large number of people desert their families as a result of addiction for Internet. Some get cheated, some even commit crimes through Internet.

　　As far as I’m concerned, everything has two sides---one is good while the other is bad, which is true of Internet. It is wise to make full use of its advantages and avoid its disadvantages. For our students, we should make the best of every minute to study rather than abandon ourselves to video games or chatting. At the same time, surfing in it for information is unnecessary to be prevented.

　　手機除了可以用來和別人通話和發短信外,它還具有很多其他的功能。假如你是某中學的學生,請根據下面提示,寫一篇120詞左右的英語短文,向你的外國朋友描述一下你理想中的手機。

　　功能:

　　聽音樂、看電視、看電影、閱讀、拍照、上網等

　　Cellphones

　　There are many kinds of cellphones on the market. Which one do you like best? Allow me to tell you what I think makes a good cellphone. I think cellphones, as high-tech machines, should be able to be used in many ways apart from simply calling and sending text messages. It should be easy for me to watch TV and surf the Internet with them. In this way, I could also read the latest news at home and abroad. What’s more, I want to read e-books on my cellphone at any time and in any place. I also want to be able to store music and films on my cellphone so that I can relax in my spare time. I also think it would be wonderful if cellphones could be used as cameras too. Then I could record all of the important moments in my life.