湖南省長沙縣實驗中學2024屆高三英語二輪復習書面表達復習重點話題指導專題06 記敘概括話題指導（教師版）
【寫作任務】
請根據下列提示以An Unforgettable Class為題寫一篇120—150詞左右的英語短文。
L今天上課時王老師宣布做一個游戲；
2．王老師在黑板上畫了一張沒有眼睛的臉，讓我們補畫眼睛；
3．李平自告奮勇上去，被蒙上眼睛后卻把眼睛畫在了額頭上；
4．老師的許價及習作者的感悟。命題思路：實踐證明，記敘文體的書面表達無論在平時英語測試中，還是在高考英語試題中，均頻頻出現。命題形式主要有兩種：提綱式和圖畫式。
【參考范文】
An Unforgettable Class
Wehad a most interesting class this morning. We became excited when Mr Wang said,
"Let's play a game together." We were eager to know what kind of game it would be.
Mr
Wang
said
nothing
but
turned
to
the blackboard. At once a face without eyes appeared on the blackboard. "Please add the eyes to the face," Mr Wang said. Oh, what an interesting job!
Li Ping volunteered to finish the task and at the same time his eyes were covered by a piece of cloth. Li Ping went to the board. We burst into laughter when he turned around. The eyes were on the forehead! How funny it looked!
What a good lesson Mr Wang gave impressed us deeply.
實例指導2—記一次宣傳抽煙的危害”的活動
【寫作任務】
上周學校組織學生參加了一次“宣傳抽煙的危害”的活動。作為其中的一名志愿者，請你用英語講述一下這次你做志愿者的經歷。詞數：120--150。
可以適當增加細節，使上下文連貫。
【寫作指導】
to start with, further , secondly, still, furthemore, third , thirdly , what’s more , last but not least, also, and then, next, moreover , besides, finally等。
【學生習作】
To persuade
people
to
give
up
smoking，I volunteered in an activity ①organizing by our school last week whose theme was the dangers of smoking .
In the morning we met at the School gate，and then we went to the nearest park，②which many people were doing morning exercise．We had a discussion there，which attracted more attention．Next，we gave out brochures where there was knowledge of the dangers of smoking to people around．At the same time , more and more people came to ask some questions．③It's smoking that ruin their bright future. They have really learned a lot from this activity.
With the help of us ，more and more people have ④made up their mind to give up smoking．We have really learned a lot from this activity . We realized that only
if we try to avoid bad habits can we enjoy the true happiness of life.
從整體上看基本完成了寫作任務，運用一般過去時以第一人稱描述了發生在上周的事情，符合題目要求。同時，作者在寫作過程中思路比較清晰，運用了一些銜接詞，如：and then，next， at the same time等，考慮到了運用一些高級詞匯或短語，如：volunteer大部分情況下我們會把它當名詞來用但作者把它當動詞來用，這點很好。但是作者在用④make up one’s mind這個短語時沒有注意到mind之前是復數their ，應用minds。句式結構上正確運用了倒裝，但在運用非謂語動詞、定語從句以及主謂一致方面出現了錯誤。例如：①處organize 與它的邏輯主語之間是被動關系，應用organized；②處使用的是定語從句，先行詞是the nearest park，在從句中作地點狀語，應用where引導；③處使用了強調句型但沒有注意到主謂一致的問題，應改為ruins。
【參考范文】
Last week our school organized an activity whose theme was the dangers of smoking．As a vo1unteer of this activity，I got a good command of knowledge which is good for our health.
Firstly，we had a Class meeting Which made us realize the dangers of smoking．Next we told people that smoking did great harm not only to our health but also to our mind，especially for us teenagers．And then many people came to ask us some questions．What impressed me most was a Senoir 3 student who became addicted to smoking because of the pressure of the following college Entrance Examination．With our efforts he decide to stops smoking．
NOW more and more people have made up their minds to
give up smoking．We should study hard and make progress every day．We Should form good habits so that we can spend most of our time learning thing useful and valuable．
實例指導3—Our Spring Outing
【寫作任務】
假設你是紅星中學高三、‘班的學生李華；為校刊英語園地寫一篇題為“Our Spring Outing”的英文稿。請根據以下四幅圖的先后順序，敘述上周你們班準備春游到春游結束的完整過程。
注意：詞數不少于60. 提示詞： 游樂園 amusement park 垃圾箱 bin
要根據具體情況選用時態。
5．多在塑造人物、展開情節上下功夫，使文章引人勝。
[寫作注意事項]
1．在記敘文中，不要過多地使用“I”，“We…”這樣句型，以免給人乏味的感覺。在以第三人稱進行敘述時，要避免過多的評論而失去客觀性。
2．盡管采用倒敘、插敘等方法可產生某種特定的效果，但就目前中學生的實際英語水平而言，最值得提倡的還是順敘的記敘順序，因為這種順序無論從時態，是過渡詞等方面都較容易掌握。
3．要緊緊圍繞主題，并盡量避免加入過多主觀判斷。
4．由于有寫作時間和字數的限制，敘述時要詳略得當。
【學生習作】
Our Spring Outing
Last Thursday, we had a class meeting to discuss where to go for our spring outing. We came up with several choices such as going boating, climbing a mountain, and going to an amusement park. Finally, we decided to go mountain climbing.
The next day, we set off early in the morning. While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view. However, when reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels. Then we started to pick up the litter. Afterwards, we put the rubbish into the nearby recycling bin and non-recycling bin respectively. We were tired but happy.
【教師點評】
范文用第——人稱描寫了“我”和同學們春游的經過，且涵蓋了四幅圖的內容，并注意運用了一些較高級詞匯，如：came up with，respectively等。同時也運用了一些較復雜句式，如：However，when reached the top，we…等，使文章增色不少。更為可貴的是，文章連貫性較強，運用了諸如finally，the next day，however等關聯詞或詞組。
實例指導4—《雙城記》
【寫作任務】
《雙城記》是狄更斯有名的一篇小說。請你根據下列內容，寫一篇故事梗概，簡單介紹這篇小說。
1．背景：法國大革命時期的巴黎和倫敦。
2．主要角色：馬奈特醫生(Dr. Manette)、
厄弗里蒙侯爵兄弟(the Marquis Evremonde)等。
3．情節：法國革命前，一個名叫馬奈特的外科醫生因為向政府揭發貴族厄弗里蒙兄弟將農村的一對兄妹無端迫害致死的罪行，被持有貴族特權的厄弗里蒙兄弟所陷害，馬奈特醫生平
白無辜地被投入巴士底監獄，在獄中被關了整整18年。后來，厄弗里蒙侯爵失去恩寵，馬奈特醫生才獲釋出獄。1739年法國大革命的風暴終于襲來了。巴黎人民攻占了巴士底獄，把貴族一個個送上斷頭臺。
注意：文章總詞數：120左右；
2)參考詞匯：陷害frame；恩寵disfavor； 巴士底監獄出the Bastille prison。
1）認真閱讀文章，讀懂文章，弄清楚各部分的內容及相互間的聯系。
2）弄清楚文章哪些內容是主要內容，哪些是次要內容。
3）寫的時候注意：與主要內容關系不大的可用三言兩語適當交待一下，主要內容則要用平實、簡練的語言概括出來。文中不要出現人物對話，應用敘述的語言描述一番，要注意故事的連貫性。
2．故事概括類文章一般要包括以下內容：
1）故事發生的背景：即故事發生的時間和地點。
2）故事中的主要人物。
3）故事情節。
4）故事的結局。
3．這類文章一般具有以下語言特點：
1）時態以一般現在時為主。
2）人稱相對統一，主要采用第三人稱。
【范文欣賞】
A tale of two cities , written by Dickens，is set in Paris and London at the time of the French Revolution．The main characters in the story are Dr. Manette who is a doctor and the Marquis Evremonde.
Before the French Revolution, Dr. Manette is framed and put in the Bastille Prison by
the Marquis Evremonde and his brother because of his exposing their crime of causing a boy and his younger sister's death without reason. And he is in prison for up to eighteen years. Afterwards, the
Marquis Evremonde is disfavored and Dr Manette is set free. When the French Revolution happened ha 1739, people took over the Bastille Prison. In the end, all the noblemen are executed one by one.
實戰演練
請根據下面的漢語提示，用英語寫一篇電影介紹。
片名：《一個都不能少》
導演：張藝謀
主演：魏敏芝
故事梗概：一所小學中，唯一的老師有事請假，13歲的魏敏芝來當代課老師。“一個都不能少”是她最重要的任務。班上最調皮的男孩逃學，魏敏芝想盡一切辦法到城里找他。最后在好心人的幫助下，他們一起回到了學校。
特點：影片中多數人用的是真實的姓名。
評論：情節感人
注意：
請不要逐句翻譯，注意文章的連貫
詞數：120左右
參考詞匯；《一個都不能少》Not one less
place , ask sb. to do sth. ; the most important thing is for her to do …; unluckily, try one’s best to do …; with the help of … , take back
第三步：簡單評論：參考的詞匯和句型：why we like reading / seeing …, we like to see/ read it because , not just …but also ,
if you don’t like , you may …
【參考范文】
Not One Less , which was directed by Zhang Yimou , is a simple but attractive story. As soon it was shown , it was received well by people.
The story happens in a primary school. The only teacher has to leave because of some reason, so a girl of 13, played by Wei Minzhi, is asked to take his place. The most important thing for her is not to lose any pupil. Unluckily, the naughtiest boy runs away from the school. Minzhi goes to the town and tries her best to find him. At last with the help of some kind-hearted people, she finds him and takes him back to their school.
Many people like this film not just because the story is moving, but also because most of the people in the film use their real names and play themselves.
下列圖畫描述了查爾斯太太為丈夫買上衣后的經歷，請根據圖畫內容，用英語寫一篇 90-120 詞左右的短文，以便刊登在 GUIDE TO ENGLISH TESTS 上。
注意：
1. 題目自擬：
2. 短文應包括圖中要點。
Mr. Charles and His New Shirt
One day Mrs. Charles went to a department store and bought a beautiful shirt for her husband. When she got back home with the shirt her husband was smoking in the sofa with a newspaper in his hand. Mrs. Charles asked her husband to try on the news shirt， but it was too large. Suddenly she came upon a good idea. She put the shirt into a basin of hot water， dried it and asked her husband to put it on， but it was too small， which made Charles quite unhappy. When their son saw this， he made fun of his father. Then Mrs. Charles made her son try on the new shirt， but it was too large for the little boy. Mr. Charles couldn't help laughing at this.
下列圖畫描述的是你的一段親身經歷，請根據此圖為一家中學生英文報的故事專欄寫一篇短文。
注意：
1 . 短文必須包括圖畫所表現的主要內容，可以適當增減細節，使其連貫、完整；
2. 敘述必須用第一人稱；
3. 詞數 100 左右。
生詞：違章者 offender n. 十字路口 crossroad（s） n.
The other day my brother and I went to the cinema by bicycle. My brother was riding with me sitting on the seat behind. As we came to the crossroads a young man and a girl came up and stopped us. “ We’ve found you at long last， ” they said， but we didn’t know them. Pointing to a policeman not far away， the young man explained， “ He stopped us about an hour ago and made us catch the next offender. So come on， stand here. Hope you don ' t have to wait as long as we did. Good luck. ”
一個星期天的上午，小麗和爸爸一起去公園，碰見了下圖所發生的事情。請根據提示和圖畫內容，用英語寫一則小故事，以便刊登在某一對外發行的英語刊物上。
[注意] 1. 短文必須包括圖畫所表現的主要內容，可以適當增減細節，使其連貫、完整；
2. 詞數：100－120.
[精品范文] One Sunday morning Xiao Li and her father went to the People’s Park together. Walking around the park， they found a girl crying by a road. They went up to her， asking what her name was and where she lived. But the girl knew nothing about it. So they had to send her to the police station of the park， where she was taken good care of. The news of the lost girl was broadcast in no time. After some time in came the parents of the girl. They were excited to see their child and expressed their thanks to Xiao Li and her father. Then they said good-bye to each other.
某對外發行的英文刊物正在進行中學生英語征文，請根據下列提示，以Don’t Lose Your Courage為題寫一篇短文，以便向該刊投稿。
[提示]
1. 上高一的第一天；
2. 英語老師劉老師面帶微笑進入教室；
3. 她自我介紹，應稱呼她Miss Liu，而非Teacher Liu；
4. 要求我們每人到教室前自我介紹；
5. 我又怕又羞難以啟齒；
6. 老師鼓勵我，我講得很好；
7. 難忘的第一節課；
8. 實踐出真知。遇到困難不能灰心喪氣。
Don’t Lose Your Courage
Never shall I forget the first English lesson given by Miss Liu. On that day， when she entered the classroom， we found that she was a young and beautiful lady with a big smile on her face. Then she introduced herself saying that we should call her Miss Liu instead of Teacher Liu， a moment later， she let all of us go to the blackboard and say something about ourselves in English in turn. When it was my turn， I felt so shy and fearful that I didn’t dare to say a word before the class. She came up to me and said kindly， “Don’t be afraid. I believe you can do it. Come and have a try.” My face turned red when I heard that. At last， I went to the blackboard and was able to do it quite well. She praised for what I had done. Up to now， I can still remember her words in the first English lesson： “Practice makes perfect. Don’t lose your courage when you meet with difficulties. Try on and on until you succeed.”
