六級最后沖刺（二）高分作文點評
四考試越來越使模板無用武之地，閱卷老師在閱卷的過程中更多的是關注同學們的用詞和句型的使用。
高分作文標志：
1、120-150字;150 180字;
2、是否長短句交叉;
3、用詞是否恰當，準確，形象，盡量使用能夠吸引閱卷老師眼球的閃光詞;
4、關鍵詞是否換用，切勿老用重復詞;
高分作文注意事項：
1.適當用被動代替主動，這樣能更客觀的反映事實,句子開頭不要總是用we / I 舉個經典結尾2004年六月作文的最后一段：It is ,therefore, high time that some applicable approaches were implemented by the service industry like that. Thus，its competitive edge will be sharpened effectively.
2.善于使用插入語，比如說把副詞、連接詞等，作插入語放在中間，一般放在主語、動詞或者助動詞后，兩邊分別加上逗號。
如however / therefore /for example/I believe做插入語放在中間，一般放在動詞，助動詞后，兩邊分別加上逗號。
比如說：Other individuals, however, take the attitude that
3.一定要學會換詞，換形象，具體的代替太寬泛的。比如上面例子中，applicable代替proper, approaches代替ways, implement代替carry out, sharpen one s competitive edge代替enhance one s competitiveness
高分作文舉例：
Computer and I By Simmy
I never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present, which exerted a tremendous fascination on me so that i indulged myself in googling an army of useful information i had expected ,and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music. That night I was sleepless, feeling that the whole world belonged to me.
exceedingly替換very
thrilling替換exciting
sth. exert a tremendous fascination on sb替換sb. be interested in sth.
google替換search
an army of替換a lot of
The dawn of the new century witnessed the increasing popularity of computers. Coincident with the advancement of science and technology, computers pouring into the current society as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals. It is no exaggeration to say we have been submerged by them, in large measure!
The dawn of the new century witnessed是一個精彩句型，用來描述在某個時期發生了什么事情;
Increasing popularity替換more and more popular
Coincident with 非常地道的，表達 與 一致 的意思，替換With
Advancement替換development
Pour into 替換enter into
Current 替換now
Appeal to sb.替換sb. be interested in sth.
Growing individuals替換more and more people
It is no exaggeration to say經典句型，說某事是毫不夸張的
For a start, we can, freely, search desired information at any moment . Little by little, our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. Additionally, we can get huge recreations online by chatting, playing games, or delivering email.
For a start替換To begin with
We can, freely, search用了插入語的寫作手法
our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened.用了非常精彩的被動
Additionally替換In addition / Besides
Deliver替換send
There is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings, in a way, especially the growing violence ,, porn pictures, AV-films emerging on the screen , which leads quiet a few net citizens to copying.
There is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings,這個句子有三個精彩之處，首先There is no denying that這個句型，還有however作為插入語，function in the disservice of替換do harm to
Emerging代替appearing
Net citizen網民，屬于精彩用詞
As a classic proverb goes that no garden has no weeds. Computers do play a positive role in the development of people lives, despite a slice of unfavorable impacts. We should ,therefore, take advantage of the fruits and avoid the opposite facet.
四考試越來越使模板無用武之地，閱卷老師在閱卷的過程中更多的是關注同學們的用詞和句型的使用。
高分作文標志：
1、120-150字;150 180字;
2、是否長短句交叉;
3、用詞是否恰當，準確，形象，盡量使用能夠吸引閱卷老師眼球的閃光詞;
4、關鍵詞是否換用，切勿老用重復詞;
高分作文注意事項：
1.適當用被動代替主動，這樣能更客觀的反映事實,句子開頭不要總是用we / I 舉個經典結尾2004年六月作文的最后一段：It is ,therefore, high time that some applicable approaches were implemented by the service industry like that. Thus，its competitive edge will be sharpened effectively.
2.善于使用插入語，比如說把副詞、連接詞等，作插入語放在中間，一般放在主語、動詞或者助動詞后，兩邊分別加上逗號。
如however / therefore /for example/I believe做插入語放在中間，一般放在動詞，助動詞后，兩邊分別加上逗號。
比如說：Other individuals, however, take the attitude that
3.一定要學會換詞，換形象，具體的代替太寬泛的。比如上面例子中，applicable代替proper, approaches代替ways, implement代替carry out, sharpen one s competitive edge代替enhance one s competitiveness
高分作文舉例：
Computer and I By Simmy
I never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present, which exerted a tremendous fascination on me so that i indulged myself in googling an army of useful information i had expected ,and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music. That night I was sleepless, feeling that the whole world belonged to me.
exceedingly替換very
thrilling替換exciting
sth. exert a tremendous fascination on sb替換sb. be interested in sth.
google替換search
an army of替換a lot of
The dawn of the new century witnessed the increasing popularity of computers. Coincident with the advancement of science and technology, computers pouring into the current society as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals. It is no exaggeration to say we have been submerged by them, in large measure!
The dawn of the new century witnessed是一個精彩句型，用來描述在某個時期發生了什么事情;
Increasing popularity替換more and more popular
Coincident with 非常地道的，表達 與 一致 的意思，替換With
Advancement替換development
Pour into 替換enter into
Current 替換now
Appeal to sb.替換sb. be interested in sth.
Growing individuals替換more and more people
It is no exaggeration to say經典句型，說某事是毫不夸張的
For a start, we can, freely, search desired information at any moment . Little by little, our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. Additionally, we can get huge recreations online by chatting, playing games, or delivering email.
For a start替換To begin with
We can, freely, search用了插入語的寫作手法
our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened.用了非常精彩的被動
Additionally替換In addition / Besides
Deliver替換send
There is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings, in a way, especially the growing violence ,, porn pictures, AV-films emerging on the screen , which leads quiet a few net citizens to copying.
There is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings,這個句子有三個精彩之處，首先There is no denying that這個句型，還有however作為插入語，function in the disservice of替換do harm to
Emerging代替appearing
Net citizen網民，屬于精彩用詞
As a classic proverb goes that no garden has no weeds. Computers do play a positive role in the development of people lives, despite a slice of unfavorable impacts. We should ,therefore, take advantage of the fruits and avoid the opposite facet.
